Question

8．假如你是李夏．你看到關(guān)國留學(xué)生Sharon 在網(wǎng)上發(fā)貼，希望有人能幫助她提高普通話（Mandarin）水平，她可以教英語作為回報．請銀據(jù)以下提示用英語給她寫一封電于哪件．
（1）表達(dá)給她提供幫助的意愿；
（2）說明你能勝任輔導(dǎo)的理由；
（3）給出講好普通話的兩點建議；
（4）提出你學(xué)習(xí)英語的具體需求．
注意：
（1）詞數(shù)120左右，開頭語已為你寫好；
（2）可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
（3）文中不得透漏個人姓名和學(xué)校名稱
Hi Sharon，
This is Li Xia．I learned from your post that you want to improve your MandarmI am quite interested in it． I think I'm fit for it．As a student，I have been learning Mandarin for many years．In addition，I am Chinese，which means Mandarin is a must for me to communicate with others in my daily life． So I'm quite confident that I can help you learn Mandarin．
Learning Mandarin takes time，so if you want to learn it well，you should spend much time practicing Mandarin everyday．As the saying goes，practice makes perfect． Besides，you can also read some books in Chinese，see some Chinese films and listen to some Chinese radio programmes．Speaking and listening are very important for a language learning，by which you are sure to make great progress．
In your post，you say you can teach English as a reward．It is just what I want．I'm eager to improve my English．So，if you allow me to help you learn Mandarin，you can also help me improve my English．We can contact each other by video chat every night for half an hour in English and half an hour in Chinese，so that we can improve our oral speaking．
Hope for you early reply!
Yours Sincerely
Li Xia．

Answer 1

分析 本文為應(yīng)用文---電子郵件的寫作，屬于提綱作文．在寫作時應(yīng)使用第一人稱，時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時．重要短語：learned from （向…學(xué)習(xí)），be fit for （勝任），a must（必須物），practice makes perfect （熟能生巧），make great progress （取得進(jìn)展），be eager to（渴望做），contact（聯(lián)系，接觸）．

解答 Hi Sharon，
This is Li Xia．I learned from your post that you want to improve your Mandarin．I am quite interested in it．（提供幫助的意愿）I think I'm fit for it．As a student，I have been learning Mandarin for many years．In addition，I am Chinese，which means Mandarin is a must for me to communicate with others in my daily life．【高分句型】So I'm quite confident that I can help you learn Mandarin．（說明能勝任輔導(dǎo)的理由）
Learning Mandarin takes time，so if you want to learn it well，you should spend much time practicing Mandarin everyday．As the saying goes，practice makes perfect．【高分句型】Besides，you can also read some books in Chinese，see some Chinese films and listen to some Chinese radio programmes．Speaking and listening are very important for a language learning，by which you are sure to make great progress．【高分句型】（給出講好普通話的兩點建議）
In your post，you say you can teach English as a reward．It is just what I want．I'm eager to improve my English．So，if you allow me to help you learn Mandarin，you can also help me improve my English．We can contact each other by video chat every night for half an hour in English and half an hour in Chinese，so that we can improve our oral speaking．（提出你學(xué)習(xí)英語的具體需求）【高分句型】
Hope for you early reply!
Yours Sincerely 
Li Xia

點評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點．根據(jù)要點適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，增加細(xì)節(jié)．寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．