Question

Florence Chadwick was a great swimmer. However, not all of her efforts worked out. In addition to working hard, she had a secret for success. At the age of 34, her goal was to become the first woman to swim from Catalina Island to the California coast. However, in 1952, the sea was like an ice bath and the fog was so dense that she could hardly see her support boats. Her body was numb(麻木) and she had been swimming for nearly 16 hours. Against the cold grip of the sea, she struggled on—hour after hour—while millions watched on national television. Alongside Florence, in one of the boats, her mother and her trainer offered encouragement. They told her it wasn’t much farther. But all she could see was fog. They urged her not to quit. She never had… until then. With only a half mile to go, she asked to be pulled out. Still warming her chilled body several hours later, she told a reporter, “Look, I’m not excusing myself, but if I could have seen land I might have made it.” It was not tiredness or even the cold water that defeated her. It was the fog. She was unable to see her goal. Two months later, she tried again. Despite the same dense fog, she swam with her faith intact（未受影響的）and her goal clearly pictured in her mind. She knew that somewhere behind that fog was land and this time she made it!

【寫作內容】

你準備參加學校最近組織的一次英文演講比賽，主題是“The Value of Goals”。在準備演講時，你讀到上面的文章，給你很大的啟發(fā)。請準備一份演講稿。開頭部分已給出，但不計入總詞數(shù)。

1、以約30個詞概括短文的要點；

2、然后以約120個詞談談你對“目標的重要性”的看法，內容包括：

1）你讀完這個故事的感受；

2）談談你是如何理解目標在人生當中所起的作用的；

3）鼓勵大家要樹立目標，并為目標的實現(xiàn)而努力。

[寫作要求]：

1．在作文中可以使用自己親身的經歷或虛構的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱。

 [評分標準]：概括準確、語言規(guī)范、內容合適、篇章連貫

Several days ago, I came across a story about Glorence Chadwick, __________

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

One possible version：

Several days ago, I came across a story about Glorence Chadwick, the first woman who succeeded in swimming the Catalina Channel. It was a goal in her mind that enabled her to make the breakthrough regardless of dense fog, which failed her in her first attempt.

I was deeply inspired by such a story, as it makes me realize the power of a goal in shaping one’s success and gives me strength to pursue my goal, despite the hardships I am to go through.

In my view, goals are crucial to guiding our lives. To begin with, as goals often go with hopes, they have the magic to enable us to be positive towards ups and downs. Moreover, bearing goals in mind, we are less likely to be blind to the ideals of our life and be distracted from our way to success. Finally, as goals are what we are longing for, they thus can motivate us to strive for greater achievement, making our lives more fulfilling.

Since goals are so significant to our lives, it is worthwhile for us students to set up goals and accomplish them with every effort we can make.

【解析】

試題分析：首先通讀短文，了解大意。找出短文的關鍵詞，尤其是每段都論及的名詞。劃出短文及各個段落的主題句。寫出1－3句話，概括全文。利用文章所給的語言材料, 分析歸納句組間的邏輯關系, 并用自己的話來寫作。概括要全面, 刪去細節(jié), 保留主要事實(信息)。語言要簡練, 概括后的字數(shù)必須滿足題目要求(30個字左右)。概括后的文章意思要通順, 行文要連貫。下面在根據(jù)要點提示寫出下面的內容，注意時態(tài)及語態(tài)。認真檢查，避免錯誤。仔細閱讀全文，查找是否有錯，注意時態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標點是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致。

【亮點說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如came across, succeeded in, regardless of,還運用了which 及who引導的定語從句及強調句型It was a goal in her mind that…等等。并注意了句子的銜接如：In my view，To begin with, Moreover，F(xiàn)inally等等。

考點：讀寫任務。