Question

16．Write a passage of at least 60words about the topic"Encouragement brings me power．"（根
據(jù)所給情景，請以"鼓勵帶給我力量"為題寫一篇不少于60個詞的短文，標點符號不占格）．
（注意：短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的名、校名及其他相關信息，否則不予評分）．

Situation：In our daily life，we need lots of encouragement from our teachers，parents or friends．Please use one or two examples to show us your opinion on this topic and give your reason（s．．
（日常生活中我們需要來自多方的鼓勵．請你舉1-2個例子闡述你的觀點，并說明理由）．

The following words and phrases are for your reference only．（下列詞語僅供參考）

difficulties          deal with        disappointed achievements        manage        powerful

Life is full of difficulties and the best way to fight against them is to stick to them．But we can't always go through these problems ourselves，so we need to gain encouragement from others．
Once I made a speech in front of the students from different schools．I tried hard to say out every word clearly and correctly．Unfortunately，I was so nervous that I forgot one part of my speech．I felt disappointed and almost wanted to give up．"You are great．"Someone shouted．Others then started to cheer me up．I suddenly became powerful and completed the speech perfectly．
From that time，I have realized that we do need encouragement from teachers，parents or even straigers，because it will give us much power to achieve our dreams．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是以"Encouragement brings me power．"為題談談鼓勵給我們帶來的力量，時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1日常生活中我們需要來自多方的鼓勵．
2一個事例
3感想
常用到的重點短語：
be full of 充滿
stick to 堅持
try to do sth 盡力做某事
give up放棄
go through 經(jīng)歷
【高分句型】
1．①Unfortunately，I was ②so nervous that I forgot one part of my speech．
①Unfortunately不幸地，作為插入語．
②so…that如此…以致于…，引導的結果狀語從句．
2．From that time，I have realized ①that we ②do need encouragement from teachers，parents or even straigers，③because it will give us much power ④to achieve our dreams．
①realize后接的是that引導的賓語從句．
②do在這里加強語氣，表示確實、的確．
③because引導的原因狀語從句．
④動詞不定式作為目的狀語．

解答 Life is full of difficulties and the best way to fight against them is to stick to them．But we can't always go through these problems ourselves，so we need to gain encouragement from others．（日常生活中我們需要來自多方的鼓勵）
Once I made a speech in front of the students from different schools．I tried hard to say out every word clearly and correctly．Unfortunately，I was so nervous that I forgot one part of my speech．【高分句型】I felt disappointed and almost wanted to give up．"You are great．"Someone shouted．Others then started to cheer me up．I suddenly became powerful and completed the speech perfectly．（一個事例）
From that time，I have realized that we do need encouragement from teachers，parents or even straigers，because it will give us much power to achieve our dreams．【高分句型】（感想）

點評 以提綱提供情景的作文．要注意遣詞造句的靈活性和語法規(guī)則的正確性，就不會造成審題不清而偏離主題，但要注意，文章必須覆蓋所提供的各個提綱的要點．行文間要注意簡化描述，用簡短的語句代替冗長的語句．在作文完成的時候，應該檢查、修改，以免遺漏一些需要表達清楚的要點和細節(jié)．